Combining Sentences Practice

Original: The eruption of Tambora caused a large number of deaths. It was the largest number of deaths since the late eighteenth century. Tambora was a volcano on an Indonesian island. Tambora exploded in April 1815. Tambora coughed up huge amounts of magma. It left a thick layer of ash everywhere. A good part of its summit cone was destroyed during the eruption. Tambora all but disappeared. In its place was a gigantic hollow. The hollow extended for miles in all directions. The explosion and tidal waves killed about 10,000 people. The tidal waves were a result of the explosion. An additional 82,000 people died from famine and disease. Ash deposits on the land caused famine and disease

Re-write: The eruption of Tambora, a volcano on an Indonesian island, caused the largest number of deaths since the late eighteenth century. The volcano exploded in April 1815, coughing up huge amounts of magma and leaving a thick layer of ash everywhere. Tambora all but disappeared when a good part of the summit cone was destroyed in the eruption. The hollow left in its place extended for miles in all directions. The explosion and the tidal waves it caused killed about 10,000 people. An additional 82,000 people died from famine and disease caused by ash deposits on the land.